Correct or improve the translation of the following Chinese sent

Correct or improve the translation of the following Chinese sentences.原文：（中国）传统节日渐行渐远，西方节日大行其道。 译文：Traditional Chinese festivals are gradually receding from us， Western festivals are becoming more and more popular. 改译：
【正确答案】：

TRADITIONAL CHINESE FESTIVALS ARE GRADUALLY RECEDING FROM US WHILE WESTERN FESTIVALS ARE BECOMING MORE AND MORE POPULAR. 

【题目解析】：两个句子的连接，缺少连词。while表示对比。